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Chapter 5
I know some people might have a problem with the chapter title. If you're a vegetarian, that's fine. I can respect that, but do respect that I am not. I'm against animal abuse, animal testing and hunting for sport. My mother is 100% Inuit Indian. Thus, my ancestors are hunters, but we respect nature. I was always taught and I believe that if you hunt and kill, you use all of that animal. The skin becomes clothing and material for rugs, furniture, etc. Same with the bones. Organs can be used, too, whatever is left is for the animals in the area to devour. I know that can seem savage, but in my mind the idea of going out to kill an animal just to mount it's head or corpse somewhere is way worse. Yes, this story involves Hunting for profit, but none of it is for sport as it is today, please remember that in the day and age where this story takes place, hunting was a sport for nobles as not only something to do, but a way to gain material and money.
I am sorry if anyone is offended, though!
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| | Re: Chapter 5
« Reply #1 on Aug 24, 2008, 8:37pm » | |
You do a great job of telling Ellipses side of the story. In a way, you made Eclipse look like a good/bad guy (I don't know anybody who can do that beside you) and Ellipses is a complainer (as you mentioned in OMWF). Drake seems so cute in this!
The vegetarian joke was funny and I think it would've been funnier if the whole camp did burn down. I'm glad that you mentioned more of Severo. The pictures weren't how I pictured him, but Severo is your creation and the pictures were awesome!
I really want to see more of TRLF in the future!
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| | Re: Chapter 5
« Reply #2 on Aug 24, 2008, 10:37pm » | |
More TRLF chapters will be posted starting September 1st! 1 chapter every week day!
And yeah, those pictures aren't perfect... Severo is actually Robin's character and we tried HARD to get good artwork of him, but...finding anthro artists is HARD!
Thanks for the review!
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« Reply #3 on Aug 28, 2008, 9:01am » | |
Yeah, Servero is a fun character and we really wanted good art of him. Unfortunately we didn't get a lot and none of them are perfect. A lot of them don't do justice with how rugged and experienced he looks.
I'm very glad you all liked the character, though. We worked hard on him! ^_^
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| | Re: Chapter 5
« Reply #4 on Aug 29, 2008, 7:22pm » | |
ok i just finished reading the other chapters on my psp and now i am back to my computer to leave a review.
Everything is slowly making me go... oh thats why hes like that, thats why he doesnt like them. damn pricilla for getting him grounded.
I'm loving this camping part is is so awesome. I like how hes reacting to all these new things and stuff. He is reminding me of my daughter, except she has no fire power to burn my house down, she reacts to everything that way with her boundless energy and no fear attitude. Can't wait to see more!
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Now come one come all to this tragic affair
Wipe off that makeup, what's in is despair
So throw on the black dress, mix in with the lot
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| | Re: Chapter 5
« Reply #5 on Sept 7, 2008, 12:17pm » | |
It was a very good chapter, I really like severo and thought that there wasn't enough of him in OMWF so seeing him here is really great.
The way you've written it is very good but I thought Drake would've been less pleased by Caucers presence then what he was, but then again he is still at a young age. It's good to see someone praising Drake on his abilities then looking at him with fear.
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| | Re: Chapter 5
« Reply #6 on Apr 4, 2009, 2:27am » | |
good chapter...
i can imagine y drake doesnt like his own dad....
and eclipse.... well all i can say is that he is so far... as sneaky as a theif... with a bag of tricks.... worse den queen bahrne herself...
severo is very interesting.... i kinda like de way u potrayed him... but it's strange tho, on why would drake want to steal his set of arrows after he has been so good to drake... doesnt make sense..... i hope it does on de next few chapters or at least at de end of tis novel
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