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|  | Chapter 45
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chapter 45
We won't... get into detail... why...or what... Pricilla... *cough*
Chapter 46
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| | Re: Chapter 45
« Reply #1 on Jan 5, 2009, 8:39pm » | |
My question is, why would Elizabeth like to hang out with her?
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| | Re: Chapter 45
« Reply #2 on Jan 6, 2009, 12:46am » | |
Because Pricilla is Royalty and Elizabeth hopes to someday be a VERY respected member of society.
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« Reply #3 on Jan 6, 2009, 6:20pm » | |
And where is the place Elizabeth lives in located on the map?
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| | Re: Chapter 45
« Reply #4 on Jan 2, 2010, 3:17pm » | |
1) The prince
should prince be capitalized?
2) “You look like hell!”
same as last chapter's
3) What on earth did this to you?
should it be Gaia or are you mentioning earth as in the ground?
4) He was a Prince
should Prince be capitalized?
5) Why him? Why not.
would it make more sense if the period was a question mark?
6) brother and sister's help
brother('s) and sister's help
7) Why are we here, who are these people?
should the comma be a semicolon? or the comma just a period and have the w capitalized?
8) it's tail whipped out (and) it's monstrous
no need for an apostrophe
9) “Oh good, you saw it, then.”
don't think you need the second comma
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